ext_7264 ([identity profile] pinkdormouse.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] winter 2004-05-07 12:19 am (UTC)

Lovely interspersing of dialogue and minimalistic descriptions that say so much.

One typo:

"Minus the blood and gore, I should hop. But yeah. Things changed, my gum-selling friend."

'Hope' surely?

Definitely bouncing with anticipation of the next part.

Gina

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